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(for Helen)


Nightflowers, after our sudden breath:
in your look the shadows of generous trees
between your fingers a clutch of grass torn
from the roots of eager life
at your feet the star-enclustered dew
and in your heart the snowflake shape of love.
Before the salmon dawn, leaping for us – that
was the sharp moment
we said our first true word, waking oh!
from childhood.

Around our world
I hear the creak of grassblades stretching
the forest approving. You and I can fly now
hand in hand into a woken time,
play with tongues of light
and the hunger of surprised skin.
Starting from silent darkness
fingers reaching blind for the new
we end my sweet speaking
enlightened.

Where convention holds court
we will swear we slept well – and hear the other truth
waking from such sleeping.
Roses have bloomed in our garden
we will never lack for flowers now
knowing truly how petals unfold.
And in the day, so knowing,
there is still in your laughing eyes the hint
of our enchanting
nightflowers.
The title intends to say (among other things) that this is my side of the conversation we had. We were so much younger and more certain then.
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Conversation piece by greenbank is "sensual and sexy, showing all the wonder inherent in young, new love without using cliche imagery" (suggester's words). ( Suggested by PoesDaughter and Featured by neurotype )
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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greenbank Featured By Owner May 12, 2014
Thank you. To be honest, I'm a bit overwhelmed - I've never experienced such a tidal wave of positive responses!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconflyingheartsplz::iconsweethugplz::iconflyingheartsplz: You deserve all the love, my dear!!! :iconaawplz:
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bittersweet-ink Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
gorgeous imagery
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greenbank Featured By Owner May 12, 2014
Thanks for the compliment. This poem was definitely an outpouring from the heart, and I'm glad so many people think it works well.
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner May 12, 2014
This does well evoke a time when I too was "younger and more certain".
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greenbank Featured By Owner May 12, 2014
Yes, well, looking at it now I think the word most glaringly absent is "gratitude." We both just took all this for granted as our right. I hope I know better now. Not that I have any regrets at all - reading this, I can still feel the magic - but nowadays I think there wold be humility, and gratitude, up there as well.
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner May 12, 2014
Sounds like you've grown not only older, but wiser.
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greenbank Featured By Owner May 13, 2014
I sure as hell hope so! I don't seek love anymore (let alone demand it of the world) - I just hope to find it. And some of those gifts have been overwhelming.
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FrostedFrozen Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Beautiful!
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